Panel 1: Close-up shot of a fly sitting on a car dashboard.

• Character: Fly

• FX: bzzzzzzz

Panel 2: Zoom out, wide shot, we can see from Naomi’s POV in the driver seat. We see the dashboard and the fly sitting placidly on it. Naomi’s hands grip the steering wheel. The panel cuts off at her forearms. She is wearing long black sleeves. Through the windshield, an extended freeway and an endless trail of black cars can be seen.

• Characters: Fly, Naomi

• FX: zzzzzzzzzzzzzz

Panel 3: White text on black background. It acts as a transition between panels.

• Caption: 105 degrees.

Panel 4: Zoom out, we can see the back of Naomi’s seat, her shoulder/arm, and the car dash. Naomi’s right arm and hand are extended, swatting at the fly, missing it. The fly hovers above the dash, avoiding Naomi’s hand. 

• Characters: Fly, Naomi

• FX:

  • FWIP

  • zzzzzzzzzz

Panel 5: White text on black background. Acts as a transition between panels.

• Caption: That’s how disgustingly hot it is in this tedious town.

Panel 6: Close-up, ¾ view, outside of Naomi’s open car window. The background behind the car is blurry to indicate motion. The fly drifts lazily through the half-rolled-down window.

• FX: zzzZZZZZZZZZZZZZ

Panel 7: Wide shot, eye level, columns of cars stopped in traffic (as if from POV of someone standing between the rows of cars and looking down the dividing line between lanes). The fly has flown farther away from Naomi’s half-rolled window, moving toward the edge of the panel. The fly is closer to the POV and larger than in previous panels as if attempting to fly off the page.

• FX: ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ

Panel 8: White text on black background. 

• Caption: But it’s not just the heat. It’s the way the air lingers.

Panel 9: Black background with a single small image of the fly on the left, as if resting on the reader’s screen. The fly is roughly the center distance between the text in panels 8 and 10.

• Character: Fly

Panel 10: White text on black background.

• Caption: It pulses, as if with breath.

Panel 11: White text on black background.

• Caption: The knotted roads—the little cars, the way they crawl up and down the twisted tarmac like fat, black beetles.

Panel 12: Bird’s eye view, a tangle of black highway roads jammed with cars. The roads are sprawling, clustered, and nonsensical in design. They are stacked on top of each other and more condensed in the center, feathering outward like threads of a cobweb.

• FX: zzzzzzzzzzz

Panel 13: White text on black background. 

• Caption: The people…

Panel 14: Closeup, a smiling Polaroid photograph of Lola, a young adult with wavy, shoulder-length blond hair. Conventionally pretty. Beauty mark on the corner of her lip. Her eyes are censored by a black bar.

• Character: Lola

Panel 15: White text on black background.

• Caption: …

Panel 16: White text on black background. 

• Caption: I know there is something in the epicenter of all this—

Panel 17: White text on black background. 

• Caption: Something honey-thick with misery.

Panel 18: A golden, viscous liquid drips down, pooling around a nondescript figure curled in a fetal position, coated in the viscous liquid.

Panel 19: White text on black background.

• Caption: It was a dizzy, drudging summer—the summer that Lola slipped on wet tile and died

Panel 20: Wide shot, low angle, looming view of the back of a traditional chapel, surrounded by sparse trees and foliage. There is no one in sight. The church is made of white horizontal planks. At the top of the chapel roof sits a cross. It’s a cloudy day. There is a visible black sedan haphazardly parked in the lot.

Panel 21: White text on black background. 

• Description: And I don’t know what I was doing.

Panel 22: Close-up, Naomi’s left hand—loosely clenched, palm-side up—holding a cigarette between her index and middle finger. POV as if she’s looking down at her hand. Blurry gravel in the background.

• Characters:  Naomi

• Fx:  sssssss

Panel 23: White text on black background.

• Caption:  I wanted to see her face again. I feared that I would sink back into that grey, aimless place.

Panel 24: Side view, Naomi’s profile, her head tilted back. She’s leaned against the outer wall of the church. She’s exhaling cigarette smoke through her lips. Her eyes are covered by Naomi’s straight, wispy blunt bangs. She has long, straight, hair pulled back in a low ponytail.

• Characters: Naomi

• Fx:  huuuuu

Panel 25: Continuance of panel 23, remains in profile view. Can see Naomi’s neck, shoulders, and torso. The panel stops at the top of her skirt. She’s wearing a black, flimsy slip dress with a black blazer layered on top. It’s an odd combination as if she doesn’t have any other black clothing that can pass as formalwear. Under her left arm is tucked a bouquet of white lilies. The bouquet is tucked backward, with the stems pinned under her arm and the heads of the flowers behind her, brushing the wall.

• Characters: Naomi

Panel 26: White text on black background.

• Caption:  I feared that I was chasing something intangible at the loneliest place on earth.

Panel 27: Medium shot, cigarette butt, still smoking slightly, on the gravel ground. 

Panel 28: Medium shot, same framing as panel 27, but we see the front of Naomi’s kitten heel grinding the cigarette into the gravel.

• Fx:  CRUNCH

Panel 29: Medium close-up, Naomi tucking a lock of hair behind her left ear. She’s standing in front of the white plank wall. She’s looking down slightly, a neutral expression on her face. Someone speaks from off-panel.

• Characters:  Naomi, Gossip

• Dialogue: 

  • Gossip: God, what a mundane way to die. Only 24 too…

Panel 30: Medium close-up, ¾ view, Naomi looking around to locate the source of the voice, her eyes looking slightly upward at something out of frame. Her arms are crossed. The bouquet of lilies can be seen, still tucked under her arm. Dialogue continues.

• Characters:  Naomi, Gossip

• Dialogue:  

  • Gossip: And someone saw the whole thing.

Panel 31: High angle, POV looks down on Naomi, Naomi looking directly above her at a window that is ajar. The gossip continues to trickle through from within the window.

• Characters:  Naomi, Gossip

• Dialogue:  

  • Gossip: No! A boyfriend?

Panel 32: Extreme close-up, front-view, Naomi’s eyes and brows, still looking upward, pupils focused on the window (out of panel). 

• Characters:  Naomi, Gossip

• Dialogue:  

  • Gossip: A coworker.

Panel 33: White text on black background.

• Caption:  

  • Gossip: I remember how noisy it was at the funeral.

Panel 34: Extreme closeup, front-view, Naomi’s mouth and some of her jaw and neck as she bites her nails on her left hand. (almost looks like a continuance of panel 32, mostly aligned, so it looks like almost a composition of her full face with her nose/cheeks covered by panel 33)

• Characters:  Naomi, Gossip

• Dialogue: 

  • Gossip: She’s supposed to be here today

  • Gossip: Poor thing. 

• Fx:  crrrrk crrrrrk

Panel 35: Extreme close-up, Naomi’s lips and teeth as she starts to bite her thumb on her left hand.

• Characters:  Naomi, Gossip

• Dialogue:  But then, what happened to—

• Fx:  CRrrrrrKKkk

Panel 36: White text on black background.

• Fx:  CRKKKKK—

Panel 37: Close-up, POV as if she’s looking down at the hand, we see Naomi’s left forearm/hand as something snatches it away from her mouth. Her fingers are splayed out, giving away her surprise. A man’s hand is gripping her wrist, the appendage seeming to emerge from the darkness with only the fingers visible.

• Characters:  Naomi, Earl

• Dialogue: Ah

• Fx:  FWIP

Panel 38: Extreme close-up of Naomi’s eye, wide with surprise, looking down/right off-panel.

• Characters:  Naomi

Panel 39: Naomi hallucinates that a giant spider is wrapped around her wrist instead of the man’s hand. Black panel with vague white illustrations of the giant tarantula wrapped around her wrist.

• Characters:  Naomi, Spider

• Fx:  BA-DUMP

Panel 40: Black panel with white illustrations. Blurry close-up shot from Naomi’s memories, a pool of blood on a linoleum floor.

• Fx:  BA-DUMP

Panel 41: Medium shot, ¾ angle, Naomi looks startled, hand retracted to her chest after she pulls her wrist away. In reaction, her head is partially turned toward her left side. A bright white light shines over half of her face. 

• Characters:  Naomi

• Fx:  snap

Panel 42: Wide shot from Naomi’s POV of Earl, the police officer, stepping closer. He’s a friendly-looking man in mid-30s, with close-cropped hair, wearing his characteristic glasses. He’s wearing his uniform and badge. He leans forward, holding a shining flashlight in one hand,

• Characters:  Naomi, Earl

• Dialogue:  

  • Naomi: Earl?

Panel 43: Wide shot, Naomi and Earl looking at each other in surprise. They recognize each other.

• Characters:  Naomi, Earl

• Dialogue:  

  • Earl: Oh, it’s just you Naomi.

  • Earl: Didn’t mean to frighten you.

Panel 44: Medium shot of Naomi crossing her arms, mouth slightly parted as if to say something.

• Characters:  Naomi

Panel 45: Extreme close-up of Naomi’s eyes, looking off to the side/down as if contemplating.

• Characters:  Naomi

• Fx:  CRrrrrrKKkk

Panel 46: White text on black background.

• Caption:  For a moment, I thought I saw something.

Panel 47: From above, Naomi’s hands and forearms, as if they are held out in front of her, palms down. The nails are jagged, the cuticles bitten and reddened.

• Characters:  Naomi

• Fx:  CRrrrrrKKkk

Panel 48: White text on black background.

• Caption:  Something familiar.

Panel 48: White text on black background.

• Caption: …

Panel 49: High angle, close up, Naomi and Earl’s legs/feet as they stand behind the church. Naomi is wearing kitten heels; Earl, scuffed boots. The cigarette butt is on the ground between them.

• Characters:  Naomi, Earl

• Dialogue: 

  • Naomi: That’s OK, Earl. I was just getting some air.

Panel 50: Eye level, medium shot of Earl. The back of Naomi’s head is in the corner of the frame. Earl looks at Naomi, looking embarrassed. 

• Characters:  Naomi, Earl

• Dialogue: 

  • Earl: I thought I heard someone, so…

Panel 51: Slightly zoom in on Earl, Earl rubs the back of his neck sheepishly as Naomi watches him.

• Characters:  Naomi, Earl

• Dialogue: 

  • Earl: I guess we’re all just a bit on edge.

Panel 52: Black background, speech bubble.

• Dialogue: 

  • Naomi: Yeah…

Panel 53: Close-up of Naomi’s grip on the bouquet of Lilies, Earl’s finger pointing toward them in the corner of the panel.

• Characters:  Naomi, Earl

• Dialogue: 

  • Earl: You should probably go give those to Lola, huh?

Panel 54: Wide shot, low angle, Naomi walking away from Earl along the side of the church, looking back slightly as he speaks from the background behind her. The sun casts a long shadow behind her.

• Characters:  Naomi, Earl

• Dialogue: 

  • Earl: Better hurry, they’re closing the casket soon.

Panel 55: Wide shot of Naomi standing in front of the church door, at the foot of the stairs, her back turned to the reader. Her arms are by her sides, holding the lily bouquet limply in one hand.

• Characters:  Naomi

Panel 56: White text on black background.

• Caption:  We were never all that close.

Panel 57: Close-up, Naomi’s hand pulls the brass doorknob slightly, pulling the door ajar (toward her).

• Characters:  Naomi

• Fx: click

Panel 58: Close-up, the other side of the door, Naomi peeks around the now open wooden door, nervous. Her body is half-hidden behind the door.

• Characters:  Naomi

• Fx: creeEEeeeeeak

Panel 59: Wide shot, Naomi’s POV, majestic view of the chapel hall, and the rows of wooden pews. There are five or six people scattered throughout the pews, varying distances away. They are all turned to look at Naomi’s direction with neutral faces. At the end of the aisle, at the altar on the other side of the hall, is a rectangular wooden coffin and a memorial photograph. 

Panel 60: Slightly low angle, long shot, view of Naomi’s profile/side view as she walks quickly down the aisle, lilies in hand. Naomi is looking straight ahead. Shot from the POV of a person sitting in the pews.

• Characters:  Naomi

• Fx: tap tap tap

Panel 61: Close-up, high angle, of one of the women sitting in the pews, staring at her as she walks by. It’s a woman in her 50’s, with chin-length hair done in a coiffed fashion. She’s wearing pearl earrings and a black sweater.

• Characters:  Gossip

• Fx: tap tap

Panel 62: Close-up of the same woman’s eye

• Characters:  Gossip

Panel 63: Medium shot, Naomi is approaching the altar, where a memorial photo of Lola can be seen in a black frame, decorated with a standard mourning ribbon. On the altar table, there is an elaborate candelabra lighting the altar. Stained glass windows can be seen behind the alter, partially out of frame. In the bottom corner of the panel, you can clearly see the bottom of her coffin in the frame. The back of Naomi’s head and some of her torso can be seen.

• Characters:  Naomi

• Fx: tap tap

Panel 64: White text on black background.

Caption: But I felt that I could know her. Like I could know her better than anyone here.

Panel 65: Low angle, as if shot from within the coffin, we see Naomi standing over the coffin, looking down slightly. A bouquet of lilies is in hand, almost out of the shot. Naomi’s other hand is poised near her chin as if she’s reaching for her mouth. Her expression is determined, but sad.

• Characters:  Naomi

• Fx: ssk

Panel 66: Zoom in for an extreme close-up, low angle,  Naomi’s lips and teeth again as Naomi begins to bite her nails nervously. 

• Characters:  Naomi

• Fx: crrk

Panel 67: A close-up of Lola’s memorial portrait on the altar. We can see the details in the photograph. The photograph was taken in front of a neutral background, clearly a studio photo. Lola looks very carefree and cheerful, with her blonde hair cut to shoulder-length and a small smile. She’s wearing a white sundress.

• Characters:  Lola

Panel 68: White text on black background.

• Caption:  Can you hear me?

Panel 69: Bird’s eye view of the empty rectangular casket with white lining and pillow inside. The panel outside of the coffin should be black/blend in with the webtoon background. The coffin is oriented vertically (upside down) so the head pillow is at the bottom. The top half of the coffin is closed (and the bottom half is open) so readers can only see the casket is empty halfway through scrolling

Panel 70: White text on black background.

Caption:  Lola?